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The Desired Realm by ~BeeCrest:iconBeeCrest:



The Desired Realm

Believe it now:
What's in front of the eye
Only seems to be an illusion,
So you'll never wonder why
The cloud behind fails to disperse
Into unseen vapors
When reality moves in closer
Until it starts to taper
Into a dying presence that
You cannot acknowledge,
Even when its reflection is clear
Like the glass upon the ledge
Blocking you from your redemption.
And hands upon the frost
Can no longer grasp onto this world
Without the unwanted cost
Of deception being destroyed
So that lives are reclaimed,
And brought into the vitality
That reeks of becoming shamed
Time after time as the days pass
Until everything blurs
And the drones crawl back to their dreaming,
Waiting for upcoming spurs
By the forces that desire
Reality's rebirth.
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Author's Comments

Hmmm, this one is iffy. It still seems off, and I'm guessing it's because I'm not used to the style. I'm happy with it though.

The poem's meter goes

6
9
7
8

after the first line. Instinct hasn't made it clear if I should just get rid of the first line or leave it. *shrugs* Comments much appreciated.

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Cleverly done. <3

Keep the first line.

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&&You're something like a phenomena--

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